For this weeks Flash Friday we had 200 words to write about the following prompt:
Dog on Colma di Mombarone. Photo by Dan Fador.
Viewpoint
Jacks gaze drifted up the intimidating mountainside. He sent Jill up ahead, she had a knack of finding the most economical path. She clambered up the slope with ease, occasionally stopping to check he was keeping up. He slipped on a muddy patch, pebbles skittering as he righted himself. Jill changed directions, finding a better route. Higher and higher they climbed, until the air was so thin he had to gulp it in. In the distance a wolf howled a lonely song, causing Jill to bark in response. Jack smiled, this was what it was all about, back to nature. As they reached the peak he felt truly alive.
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I watch as master scrambles up the hillside, his measly two legs affording limited purchase. I hate these walks, he is always moments from death. I try to find a path that is safe. A dangerous smell catches my nose, a bear is close by. Master slips in the dung before I can warn him. I trace the scent and change our path to keep him safe. A distant cousin howls hungrily as he catches masters scent. I warn him off. Finally we make it to the top, my heart pounding from the exertion and the stress of keeping master alive.
I like the two voices and the take on the classic nursery rhyme.
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. With hindsight I needed a few more words to do this properly, may have been a tad ambitious trying to squeeze 2 stories in to 200 words!
Love the different viewpoints! Both sound so true to their respective owners, and so true to how we earthly critters see the world around us! 😀
Thanks! One day I am going to have to get round to writing an entire story from a dogs eye view 🙂